Monday, October 24, 2011

Ahoy! Draft 5: UBA


So here it is--for now at least. I simply must go to CVS and get something for these sniffles. I'll replace this post later if I come up with anything significant changes for this draft. Otherwise, onward to draft 6!


I. The Urge
This strange, animal energy,
—This deep, hard need to fuck—
This enthousiasmos so
Possessive & primal,
Heaves me, heedless & heady,
Overwhelms & seizes me.
I cannot hold, cannot see,
And cannot—would not—stop it.

My eyes, my lips, my body,
Hands and dick and legs and ass,
These things that crave
Lust and long and hunger for
The sureness of another
In my arms and ‘gainst my chest.
Sinew flexed and ready now--
To seize and seize and seize.

Too long stalled in hesitance,
I now come crashing headlong
Into you between bedsheets,
No longer my own in the night:
Seized as much as seizing you.
Body alongside body,
Point-to-point and parallel
Mouth-to-mouth and bone-to-bone.

I may not know whence it comes,
Nor whither it may soon go,
But you are here now before me
And its object, its treasure;
I want you now
—And I will have you.


II. The Burden
But it’s hard to say for sure, sometimes,
When we get so damn horny,
When/and everything gets all mixed up.
Why must we think?
It’s not what I want.
Who is this person in my arms?
What am I even doing here?
Why do I always do this?
This ought to be so wonderful,
So easy.
Why must we fight to make sex something beautiful?
Why must fun take/be so much effort?

Is it the fault of this modern age,
Or just my own misgivings?
That even basest passions
Are questioned, named, and judged,
--one night stands and love making
Strings attached & otherwise.
Why can’t things be just as they are
--Why can’t sex just be sex
(Or even less, now & then)?
Why must something so simple
Become so complicated.
But why am I worrying?
Why must we think?
Why must we think?

But how much hotter our passions burn
When fueled with thoughts of love.
How much more eager and willful we become
When we call it love--or think we can--
When we feel wanted, when we feel grateful,
When we want to believe, in Love and Truth,
In goods and bads and etiquette.

But no less am I a man or mammal
Nor any more can I keep that urge in check,
Than can I always claim such altruisms as love,
Such verities of the soul;
And it worries me.
For I do not know if I love you
—Or just want you—
Nor do I know if I always will.


III. The Aftermath
But, here now, let's savor this much, this time,
This little we can surely give eachother;
This fleeting, ecstatic moment for now.
Nevermind the wherefores & whereafters,
O, let them come later!
                           We are here now;
Let's be immediate and beautiful
With one another while we still can—try,
Ere those shudders and exhalation come
And take with them this magical thinking,
This sweet moment, the memory of it;
And leave with us in its passing
Those cold and lonely facts & futures
As we lie entangled and sweaty and
Sticky—and possibly second guessing.


(And poison actions with thought?)

Sunday, October 23, 2011

5th Time's the Charm

So draft 5 of "The Urge, The Burden, & The Aftermath" is coming around the bend, and it's kinda a amaaazin feeling. I think I've finally (!?) gotten a handle on that irreverent middle section; the dialectic shall stand!! XD

I'm sure I've mentioned it at least one other time, but the middle section of this poem was horribly disobedient & infuriating. It just didn't fit, it didn't flow, it didn't work.

Somewhere between the 3rd and 5th drafts, I've finally sucked it up and starting slashing whole chunks. See, I'd begun to realize and even accept that there were sections that really belonged in another poem I've yet to write. Until realizing this, I'd clung so hard to these bits--they were & are pretty even if they don't belong in this particular poem.

Whether or not I ever use these bits afterall is less important than getting this particular poem to work. And frankly I kinda like the way it's looking. I still need to type it but it seems to read more smoothly & sensibly. Of course, having written that I've probably jynxed it, yeah? Oh well.

But not to worry, I've got about an hour and a half to work on that. Just sitting here, in the window of an NYC starbucks, oggling eye candy, waiting for my friend, and tapping away at the next draft of an increasingly satisfying poem :)

Wednesday, October 12, 2011

Drafts: The Urge, The Burden, And The Aftermath.

This the 4th draft. By this point I don't feel I need to keep retyping each draft on the typewriter because the first and third sections are so nearly stabilized--most of their changes will be single words or lines being swapped out. That would make for a lot of unnecessary typing, I think.

As has been the case since just about the beginning, the second section is what's giving me the most trouble. It really pisses me off sometimes, but it's come along--further and further with each draft. Still, be wary as you read it: It's not done yet. Certainly not in the way the first and third sections feel.

At this point, I really want to get things [feeling?] balanced. I know the second section is unsightly and ungainly, but I'm still trying to work it out. Frankly, I think it's seriously important to the rest of the poem or [I hope] I wouldn't have so stubbornly stuck by it at all.


I. The Urge
This strange, animal energy,
—This deep, hard need to fuck—
An enthousiasmos so
Primal & possessive
Heaves me, heedless & heady.
I cannot hold, cannot see,
And cannot—would not—stop it.

Sometimes it just seizes me,
My eyes, my lips, my body,
Hands and dick and legs and ass,
And chest and neck and back,
These things that crave
The sureness of another
In my arms and against me.
Sinew flexed and ready now
To seize and seize and seize.

And I come crashing headlong
Into you between bedsheets,
No longer my own in the night,
Seized as much as seizing you,
Mouth-to-mouth and bone-to-bone
Body alongside body,
Point-to-point and parallel.

I may not know whence it comes,
Nor whither it will soon go,
But you are here now before me
And its object, its treasure;
I want you now
—And I will have you.


II. The Burden
Hard to say for sure((...))
When we get so damn horny.
O, but the doubts we will commit, the demands for justification,
When this ought (to) be so wondrous,
So easy.
Why must we fight to make sex something beautiful/wonderful
Why must fun take so much effort?

Where all (that) it means to be alive,
To be human, to be animal,
Comes together in oblivious union,
There, the terrible truth of knowing waits,
Lurks the burden
Of human ideation and our animal heritage.
And yet it all ends up so much less high flown.

Why must we think
It's too much to bear sometimes,
When even basest passions
Are questioned, named, and judged,
--gangbangs and love making
And one night stands
With strings attached or otherwise--
Why must something so simple
Become so complicated

But how much hotter our passions burn
When fueled with thoughts of love.
How much more eager and willful we become
When we call it love--or think we can--
When we feel wanted, when we feel grateful,
When we want to believe, in Love and Truth,
In goods and bads and etiquette.

But no less am I a man or mammal
Nor any more can I keep that urge in check,
Than can I always claim such altruisms as love,
Such verities of the soul;
For I do not know if I love you
—Or just want you—
Nor do I know if I always will.


III. The Aftermath
But, here now, let's savor this much, this time,
This little we can surely give eachother;
This fleeting, ecstatic moment for now.
Nevermind the wherefores & whereafters,
O, let them come later!
                                         We are here now;
Let's be immediate and beautiful
With one another while we still can—try,
Ere those shudders and exhalation come
And take with them this magical thinking,
This sweet moment, the memory of it;
And leave with us in its passing
Those cold and lonely facts & futures
As we lie entangled and sweaty and
Sticky—and possibly second guessing.